Talk:Shannon O'Donnell

I found this to be a very interesting article, but there were several things that could stand to be corrected:
 * The grammar and spelling could be improved.
 * Possibly, this article could be revised/condensed. It feels almost like a minute-by-minute synopsis of the related Voyager episode (in fact, it might almost serve well in the article for the episode).

I would make some of these revisions (which I think would greatly improve the readability of the article) myself, but I have not seen the episode in question, and don't feel qualified to make the necessary revisions (other than minor grammatical/spelling fixes), as I worry about changing the content or leaving out essential information. -- umrguy42 08:50, 17 Apr 2005 (UTC)


 * Grammer and spelling could be improved
 * It probealy does but that has to do with my lack of understanding the english language. It is not my native tongue. Single words are not that of a problem, that's why there are dictionaries, but grammer is something else.:)


 * Possibly, this article could be revised/condensed. It feels almost like a minute-by-minute synopsis of the related Voyager episode (in fact, it might almost serve well in the article for the episode).
 * Your right it is (almost) a minute-by-minute synopsis. My reason being that the characters in this episode are not recurring, so there is less to tell about them than recurring characters, and I wanted to describe their 'life' from their point of view, in stead of 'this was yadayada and lived during 1000 etc..' It was just something I wanted to try out. It did the same with all the main characters of this episode. Maybe all articles of the main characters should be condensed and the rest put in the episode synopsis. To put the same information in the episode synopsis again seems to much. -- Q 19:58, 19 Apr 2005 (UTC)